Sleep is Under Rated. Right??

I tried to sneak up on myself tonight, you know to write a 6 Sentence Story. It’s the blog hop hosted by Zoe. Yeah, that Zoe 😀  This week’s cue word is “stick

Not as easy as you think, sneaking up on yourself, so I’ve sent up a plea to the vowel gods and implored the concierge  of consonents to assist me with this, my entry for this week’s 6 Sentence Story. I mean, if the stars can occaisionally align, then why, oh why can’t the independent letters of the English alphabet align themselves into words to form a clever little story, poem, vignette….something. I mean we’re only talking 6 sentences!

It was Christmas Eve, all Currier & Ives smeared windows, picture perfect New England winter wonderland day, oh, so silent.

Slight crunching could be heard from boots trying to walk on frozen water, almost successful, treading carefully, making their way guiltily to the front door, a stick snapping in two, a precursor to events yet to unfold .

Hushed, yet not night, the sun ambled it’s way, rolling like a beach ball over the dunes towards the distant blue black horizon, to take refuge for another cycle, night following a day, always.

Life, it seemed, would never be the same, an era ending, not so much in fireworks as in the slow extinguishing of a single, solo, smoldering ember, the dying of a fire never meant to go out.

Where, when, how, do paths veer, hearts wander, intent go astray….

Christmas Day, surely was solemn as two hearts lay, torn asunder, beneath the low hanging branches of a holiday tree adorned majestically, sadly for a last time, would the star shine.




24 thoughts on “Sleep is Under Rated. Right??

  1. UP October 27, 2016 / 6:56 am

    Single solo smoldering ember -now, that’s good stuff!


  2. oldegg October 27, 2016 / 7:17 am

    Well you have outdone yourself today with the poetic descriptions included in this prose.


  3. messymimi October 27, 2016 / 7:29 am

    Wow. You’ve distilled all the sadness amazingly!


    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 27, 2016 / 7:37 pm

      Thank you! What a wonderful compliment. distiller of sadness. Hopefully, only on rare occaisions 😀


  4. valj2750 October 27, 2016 / 7:32 am

    Wow, Denise. You’ve captured the sadness in the season of joy. Guess the alphabet was muse inspired today.


    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 27, 2016 / 7:39 pm

      Thanks Val. I’m not usually ahead of the seasons or even seasonal. Don’t know where it came from!
      And yes! the alphabet was indeed my friend 🙂


  5. Josie Two Shoes October 27, 2016 / 10:55 am

    Your intro was clever indeed, but your story left me breathless. So intense, and so very accomplished at painting the picture with words that seeped into our hearts. Very well done!


    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 27, 2016 / 8:16 pm

      Thank you so much Josie. It feels good to know I can write words that affect someone. Makes me want to keep trying!


  6. zoe October 27, 2016 / 11:31 am

    Wow!!! What a comeback!!! Awesome story!


  7. Clark Scottroger October 27, 2016 / 5:26 pm

    very engaging… which, given the limitations of the form, all the more effective.


    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 27, 2016 / 8:19 pm

      Thank you Clark. That is so key in writing – being able to engage the reader. I’m glad I was successful at it today!


  8. Deborah Lee October 27, 2016 / 9:22 pm

    A sad six. 😦 Any writing that makes us feel is good writing, even if it’s sad. 🙂


    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 28, 2016 / 6:35 am

      Well said Deborah. It is all about emotional content. Thank you for stopping by 🙂


  9. Deborah Lee October 27, 2016 / 9:23 pm

    And I forgot to say, I *love* Chrissie Hynde!


  10. Pat Brockett October 30, 2016 / 1:48 am

    This was an amazing piece of writing. I love this kind of descriptive writing. You carried our hearts from a beautiful scene to a sad and solemn ending, but left us with some hope in “would the star shine.”


  11. Cynthia October 30, 2016 / 8:00 am

    I saw the email come in earlier this week and just wanted to say hi! Great six sentence read – the ending leaves so many possibilities. Hmm…could be a brief prologue to a book! 😀
    Sending you hugs!


    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 30, 2016 / 11:16 am

      Hey! Thanks Cyndi. And thanks again! For the prologue idea 😀
      Encouraging words. I can use them always 🙂
      Hugs back for you my friend. Have an excellent day and a very good week 😀


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