3 Stars x 2. It’s 6 Sentence Story Thursday!

Hello, welcome to GirlieOnTheEdge. Thursday’s special is a generous portion of hand cut letters, gently seared into thin waferlike words, layered over a bed of 6 sentences. Hostess Zoe, of Uncharted, will be serving a full menu of such delicacies at her bloghop, Six Sentence Stories.

Ms. Zoe is most cordial and offers her kitchen to anyone looking to indulge in the culinary art of Six Sentence Story creation. Seating is unlimited and no reservations needed! The only requirement is that your dish contain only 6 sentences with no artificial additives, and in case you are tempted – absolutely, no additional sides. Your sentences may be served grilled, barbequed, sauteed, baked or fried… Ingredients, method of preparation and presentation, all entirely up to you. Come now, join us in a feast of creative camaraderie.

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I’d been wearing sadness so long even the lining had begun to fray, rent from its outer shell.

Still warm, still protection against the elements, what hadn’t I weathered short of my inability to inure myself from affairs of the heart, the temptations of an infatuous fling.

If sadness is the coat, then fear is the belt cinching it closed at my waistline, half way between head and feet, thought and action.

So many friends gone, taken by death, lost to distant geography, I counted my blessings (still) feeling the allure of youth despite appearance otherwise.

Standing in the shadows, wrapped tightly, a low ground fog cooly caressing my ankles, I recognized the platform where I first found sadness.

Startled from my reverie by the distant bellows of an approaching locomotive, its echos carried by midnight’s hush, I turned and reached for his outstretched hand.

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14 comments

  1. UP · February 22

    The sadness/coat/belt line is classic writing! This could turn into something. Nice six, now more please.

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  2. valj2750 · February 22

    This is amazing. The imagery and metaphors are fantastic. Very emotional and gripping.

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  3. GirlieOnTheEdge · February 22

    Thank you, Val. I’m glad you enjoyed it. It began as something else but somehow the original words got pushed aside lol

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  4. Lisa A. Listwa · February 22

    I love this so much! Love what you’ve done with the coat imagery.
    This, especially, is terrific…
    I’d been wearing sadness so long even the lining had begun to fray…

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  5. GirlieOnTheEdge · February 22

    Thank you Lisa!🤗

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  6. Clark Scottroger · February 22

    very nice noir feeling to the six (and like the others, the belt thing, most excellent)

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge · February 22

      Thank you. I never actually set out intentionally to write in that style, but if it came across, that makes me happy.

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  7. Pat B · February 22

    You are an incredible writer! So poetic. Love this.

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  8. messymimi's meanderings · February 22

    Wow. Very deep feelings, and well described.

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  9. dyannedillon · February 22

    As I read your story, I imagined the frayed coat, the belt squeezing, and for a moment, I was weighed down with sadness that I didn’t even possess. Excellent!

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