“To weep is to make less the depth of grief”. It’s a 6.

The title is from Henry VI, Part III. The scene below is taken from the as yet unpublished, “Annaliese’s Dream“.

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Driven by an emotional anvil, Annaliese dropped to her knees, soft earth giving way slightly, the grave site only four weeks fresh.

Tears, trailing the soft contours of her cheeks, fell intermittently, plop.. plop .. plop, upon the 2.5′ x 8′ barren rectangle, a grotesque reminder of what lay beneath.

Like a cruel movie trailer, their wedding day played over and over in her head, her brain branded by the silent reel, Annaliese acknowledged brides (and sometimes grooms) got left at the alter, but how many are left at the alter because the groom got himself killed on his way to the church?

The police investigation into Ian’s accident revealed nothing suspicious (as if there was anything to suggest “scorned bride goes ballistic! plots fiance’s murder for wedding day!”) and once closed, left her walking the precipice of existential suicide.

She tried to make herself believe the accident was nothing more than a barbaric cosmic joke, destiny on crack, but her gut was telling her something just wasn’t right, instincts screaming unintelligibly until the day the black BMW 750i pulled up in front of her house.

2 men, stepping straight out of “Men in Black”, knocked on her door last week and dropped a bombshell that made it clear as Icelandic calcite crystal, that Ian’s accident was no accident.








21 thoughts on ““To weep is to make less the depth of grief”. It’s a 6.

    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 28, 2019 / 6:17 am

      No argument with that!
      Unfortunately, we often either ignore or don’t act on the “warnings” our instincts give us.


  1. UP February 28, 2019 / 12:38 am

    There are no coincidences. Great six.

    Liked by 1 person

    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 28, 2019 / 6:24 am

      Thanks! No ma’am… she really is a grieving almost widow. With a big surprise concerning her late, love of her life 😀


  2. clark February 28, 2019 / 7:23 am

    nice narrative momentum*
    engaged to start, vehicle begins to roll gravity and pain running behind, pushing and laughing.
    fun Six

    *possibly not a ‘real’ rhetorical term

    Liked by 1 person

    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 28, 2019 / 1:45 pm

      Thank you, Clark. Glad you enjoyed the ride!

      * and possibly it is 😁


  3. westcoastwoman February 28, 2019 / 10:10 am

    Left me wanting more…..so intriguing and engaging.

    Makes me realize how much can be conveyed with less, less words, sentences …….. thanks for this opportunity to explore Six.


    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 28, 2019 / 7:48 pm

      Thank you, I’m glad you enjoyed it.

      Exactly! It’s what I love about this hop – the challenge to not only write a story in 6 sentences but for me, in as few words as possible without sacrificing style.

      I’m glad you joined in this week. Hope we see you again 🙂


  4. Pat Brockett March 1, 2019 / 12:47 am

    This is a great tease. Let’s hope “Annaliese’s Dream“ gets published. Well done.

    Liked by 1 person

  5. Lisa Tomey March 1, 2019 / 8:45 am

    This is amazing! “existential suicide” may be my favorite expression in this theme.

    Liked by 1 person

    • GirlieOnTheEdge January 16, 2020 / 8:23 pm

      Thanks again, Violet.
      When I re-read it after almost a year, I too still liked it but realized even more what an enormous challenge writing is 😀

      Liked by 1 person

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