Evening interlude. It’s a 6.

Eyes languidly opening, as if pried by miniature, cushion tipped crowbars, I attributed the difficulty waking to the late spring evening air that flowed freely from my open bedroom window; I questioned if perhaps I’d been dreaming, vivid dreaming? But there it was again – a repetitive, peculiar sound, no, more a repetitive grating noise, like a human fingernail raked slowly over the slate of a 3rd grade classroom chalkboard, fingertip all white alabaster dusted. Scooching up against the pillows, willing myself to a state of semi-consciousness I fumbled for the metal chain of the banker’s lamp, then remembered I’d forgotten to replace the bulb.

Chi-chi-chitttttt – holy mother of…. head turning all Linda Blair like, I gazed in horrific amazement at 2 eyes in the far corner of the room peering out of a ratlike, but not, body, black fur blending into the nighttime as if it stepped out of the darkness itself; neither of us moving, until it screamed an indescribable bark. Like a missile launched prematurely, my body shot out of bed in a single levitation and I stood, frozen.

Feeling a cool breeze push at my shoulders, I turned towards the open window, the window whose torn screen I’d forgotten to replace, the window through which my nocturnal visitor gained entrance and who was now screaming to be let out….


24 thoughts on “Evening interlude. It’s a 6.

  1. UP April 4, 2020 / 1:19 pm

    I want to open the windows but the pollen count is so high it would be a mess. Good six.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge April 4, 2020 / 2:15 pm

      I know what you mean! The pollen is now starting to coat the cars and my nasal passages, lol.
      Thanks, Paul.


    • faithanncolburn April 5, 2020 / 1:09 pm

      Yes. Aren’t sinus headaches grand? How do you know if it’s allergies or the virus?


  2. Susan Zutautas April 4, 2020 / 3:02 pm

    Chills went down my spine at the thought of nails going down a chalkboard. and then again when she saw the eyes. Great stuff here!


    • GirlieOnTheEdge April 4, 2020 / 7:52 pm

      You and me both. Think pretty much everyone feels that way about nails on a chalkboard 😀
      Thanks, Susan!

      Liked by 1 person

  3. clark April 4, 2020 / 8:33 pm

    Good Six.

    probably the two scariest environments, unknown sounds and dawning of consciousness (waking up).
    nicely drawn scene, yo

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge April 4, 2020 / 8:55 pm

      I’m in total agreement. The sound thing (especially if it coincides with waking up) can be particularly frightening as imagination gets cranked before the practical cognitive part of the brain tells you you’re being silly…it couldn’t possibly be lol


  4. Rhen Laird April 4, 2020 / 9:14 pm

    Oh my goodness, Scary!! And you’re so right…a noise that wakes us from sleep can get the pulse racing until we find the source 🙂

    Liked by 1 person

    • GirlieOnTheEdge April 5, 2020 / 8:18 am

      Thanks, Rhen! As long as we “don’t go down to the basement”, lol


      • Rhen Laird April 5, 2020 / 5:29 pm

        Hahahahaha–for sure! Glad I don’t have a basement in my apartment…just the crazy woman below me, bless her soul 🙂


    • GirlieOnTheEdge April 6, 2020 / 7:28 am

      Thanks. Yeah, sometimes those inconsequential tasks we procrastinate completing can come back to “haunt” us 🙂

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  5. Lisa A. Listwa April 7, 2020 / 10:45 am

    I’m with Paul on the windows vs. pollen issue. Gah. My head and eyes are just terrible right now.
    As for the story – very nice. Very good. I got a distinct Poe-like vibe from this, maybe the sense of fear and unknown coupled with dark coupled with the first-person narrator telling us how the fear evolves. Really good six.

    Liked by 1 person

    • GirlieOnTheEdge April 7, 2020 / 10:58 am

      Hear you loud and clear!
      Thank you, Lisa. I appreciate your feedback 🙂


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