Still water. It’s a 6.

GirlieOnTheEdge

Night sky black, moon slice through leafed branches brown, sparkle dots light the way
Journey set in motion, path illuminated, remnants of day

Carry them silent, boot crunch debris, storm unintended, two voices
Echoes ricochet, all what is what is taken what is left, two choices

Momma said be careful, still water don’t bend, hard pan don’t give
Walk straight your own path, if you want to live

22 thoughts on “Still water. It’s a 6.”

  3. Zack and Zelda August 27, 2020 / 12:41 am

    Wowza, 5-Star!!

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      • Zack and Zelda August 27, 2020 / 8:07 am

        “We” are happy to celebrate you, Denise!! You are most appreciated–abundant blessings to you<3

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  4. clark August 27, 2020 / 6:33 am

    ‘cellent poemfying*

    this one had, to my un-educated ear, an interesting rhythm, one that was sorta like walk-running down a decline comprised of loose gravel and un-reliable earth

    music can make a body smile

    *not a ‘real’ word

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 27, 2020 / 7:24 am

      Thank you, Clark.
      Ah. I be unlearned in the ways of the poetry but glad you found so.
      Music can. Funny you say that as you can hear the smiling when some musicians play 🙂
      *not yet anyway, lol

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  8. The Vintage Toy Advertiser August 29, 2020 / 12:01 pm

    Love this poem, D, how it punches and has a swagger in its melody.
    So moody, lyrical and deep.
    Like how you used the cue word for how water can be when it won’t budge. And good maternal advice.

    Fits fine with the Larkin Poe vid – never heard of them, so thanks for the introduction, their voices work well together, and that lap steel guitar playing, wow!
    Cool name too, linking two writers like that.

    😎

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 29, 2020 / 7:33 pm

      Thanks, V. Glad you felt a punch.
      The water thing kind of popped into my head and when it did, the hardpan reference was instantaneous. I lived in Florida for almost 10 years and while the water table is pretty high, depending on where you dig into the earth, you can run into hardpan. Amazing stuff, lol.

      Glad you like them. They’re very talented. Had run across them on YouTube awhile back. I used their rendition of the following Skip James song for a Six not too long ago. Love it.

      You know, until you said that, I never got the connection about writers! Very cool 😀

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      • The Vintage Toy Advertiser August 30, 2020 / 2:09 pm

        Yes, it was punchy alrighty. Look forward to your next poem – as well as your usual prose. I love how poems can experiment and go for the lyrical jugular!
        Will check out more Larkin Poe for sure 😎

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