Skyscrapers stood silent, greyed sentries guarding the deserted city whose streets were more empty and desolate than Times Square at 7:00 am, January 1; where orphaned newspaper pages, tossed and rolled like semi flattened tumbleweeds, blew along pot-holed blacktop, catching every so often on the back tire of an abandoned car.
Road worn and weary, we’d been on the move nonstop for 13 days and desperate for safe haven, somewhere to rest, recharge and most importantly, do reconnaissance of the immediate area. Walking past smashed storefronts, jagged plate glass window shards lining the sidewalks like eager patrons opening day of a new high end boutique, we’d all but given up finding a place with easy access to the street yet not totally open to it either.
Defacto leader of this motley band of survivors, I’d felt an odd relief when, after only a few days on the road, I discovered we’d all grown up on movies about vampires and werewolves, natural disasters, and… zombies; that not a one of us hadn’t watched all 6 Resident Evil films so naturally, in our minds and imaginations, we were convinced we knew what to expect.
Over here! I think I found the perfect place – trying not to run, our bodies anticipating the opportunity to finally sleep, we quickly walked the half block towards what we desperately hoped would be a place we could safely crash; pushing each other through the doorway of Newbury Furniture and More, the high fives started to fly as we realized we’d actually get to sleep in a bed.
Basking in our amazing stroke of luck, none of us noticed the golden retriever emerging from the back part of the store, an almost comical parade of gold colored puppies wobbling along behind her; in another lifetime this might have been a heartwarming scene but current day, not so much, as all of the puppies were growling; we knew right then, this was about to get very, very messy…
An excellent take (and title) on the zombie genre, which I love dearly. Your scene setting is perfect in capturing the desolation as the motley band of survivors search for shelter – and the realisation of their plight via a shared experience of zombie media is a nice touch, bringing everything bang up to date and context.
The discovery of the parade of puppies is unexpected and chilling, and as the last line drifts away… the reader can only imagine how messy this is going to get. Yikes.
Brilliant six, D 😎
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‘Morning, V. Thank you. As I was writing, I was thinking there can’t be anyone who hasn’t watched at least a few end of the word as we know it movies 🙂
I decided to leave the end scene to the readers’ imagination. Initially, in my mind’s ending to the story, it concluded with a graphic and gory scene as the “band” were forced to brutally kill the puppies. Having just killed their mother, the very hungry zombie pups were extra p-offed 😆
One day I hope to achieve the skill to write such a scene as I imagined – the emotion of extreme relief by the survivors in hopes they had 1 night to rest, pull themselves together, enjoy a brief and rare sense of security only to then be faced with the unimaginable. Who in their right minds wouldn’t hesitate (at least for a few seconds) slaughtering a bunch of golden retriever puppies. Right?!
P.S. I love dogs, so don’t ask where that idea came from, lol. Reading the story this morning, my pre-caffeinated self is asking “where in the hell did that come from?” lol
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Morning, D (or almost evening here, bonsoir!) 🙂
Yes, when I saw your title I thought: woah, hang on, this means business! But I still didn’t anticipate that outcome… and good you left if for the reader to imagine.
To be fair, you did the job well in getting the ideas of extreme tiredness and relief across in the small confines of a 6SS. If the scene was in a novel or short story you would have the luxury of dialogue and focusing on one or two characters to enhance the states.
And agree… who in their right minds wouldn’t hesitate a few seconds at that final act of slaughter! And imagine the mental nightmares after? And the next time you saw a dog? Or heard one barking?
I think you played well to the fears of the reader, plus turned upside down something many would hold dear. Top notch horror I say.
See ya soon and enjoy your Sunday 🙂
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Bonsoir, V!
Thanks for sharing that – if I was reading it, as someone else’s story title, I’d immediately be saying “oh no!!!”, picturing the most awful of possible scenarios, lol.
I appreciate your feedback. Can’t say that I’ve written any “horror” stories so it’s feels good to know this offing ranks on the TVTA horror-meter 🙂
Enjoy your Sunday as well, what remains 😉
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Yep, it ranks well. Do more if the mood takes.
True, Sunday’s almost done here, so nite nite, and just seen the new prompt word you posted… interesting 🙂
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Great Six–and this is my fave, it’s So BRILLIANT: “orphaned newspaper pages”. Perfection!!
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Thank you, Z & Z! Glad you enjoyed 🙂
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Sure did! You’re most welcome! 🙂
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Awww puppies… OH! ZOMPUPS! So much for sweet dreams… Well told with excellent contrast. Twisted just perfectly.
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LOL Had to do it, Lisa 😜 Thank you!
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Lol @Zompups!
Imagine if it had been kittens? The whole internet would be after D’s blood! 🙂
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Zomkits!! Oh my!! The horrors!! The difference is that the kittens would wait to be fed while the pups would go get ’em. LOL
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@Zomkits 😂
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Just gift back last night. Good six! Puppies, zombies oh my !
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Welcome back, Paul. Thank you! Yes, I know. What came over me, lol.
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My heart is breaking as i see myself in the scene, about to fight mad zombie dogs that look so dang cute. Well done!
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I know, Mimi! Thank you 🙂
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post -apocalyptic adventures, what is not to like?
nice job engaging us not only with the static environment but by introducing a threat, cranks up the uh, oh gain quite a bit.
nice ‘sharp angle’ transition with the dogs!
looking forward to what happens next!
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Agreed!
Thank you, Clark. Yeah, about those dogs, lol.
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It looks like the golden retriever and family got there first.
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They sure did, Frank and they’re not taking too kindly to the intrusion.
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…loved this,right down to the growling golden retriever puppies…it indeed would be getting “messy”. Brought to mind something asked the other day”who would you take to war?” Scrolling through the people I know in my mind it is not always the one’s you thought initially….”not Jane she would probably sleep with the enemy”:) just a wonderful 6.
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Thanks, Janet 🙂 Interesting question. I don’t know that there’s more than a few I’d take, lol
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…or the ones I would were surprising, for qualities you don’t necessarily use or need in day to day life. 🙂
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Perfectly creepy, like growling Goldens? And puppies to boot? Jeez and yikes.
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Why, thank you Ms. D. 😀
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Fabulous, Denise! I love the initial stark scene setting, then Zombie puppies, now there’s a new twist. 🙂
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Thank you, Chris!
By product of a very tired brain, lol
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