Seven. It’s a 6.

The burn off from the horror show that just took place in an abandoned furniture store, dead of night, rose like slow steam off a Florida highway after a late afternoon summer shower. No nightmare of mine ever saw the slaughter of a raging female canine and 6 puppies in the name of survival, let alone the survival of the human race.

Jaya’s face spoke the torment and rage, guilt and disbelief we all felt; blood spatter, mixing with sweat and anguish, smeared our faces, our clothing, we were spent. “What the fuck was that”! more statement than question, her outrage was met with silence as each of us tried to process the residual energy from the preceding violence; exhaustion had turned the rest of us mute and in that brief moment came the sound of an eerie, whimpering echo from the back of the store; “shh-sh, listen“… Jaya moved swiftly, deliberately towards the direction of the sound; armed with guns, large knives and a baseball bat, we followed, fanning out as we approached the store’s back showroom.

Approaching the far corner of the showroom, the sound growing louder, Jaya signaled suddenly to stop –  a patch of golden fur was sticking out from under a couch skirt; wielding a 3 ft. piece of mahogany from a shattered table top, she reached out with it and lifted the skirt – cowering and trying its hardest to disappear into the microfiber of the skirt was a golden retriever puppy – “Don’t fucking touch it Jaya! we just slaughtered its mother and siblings, kill it”!

“Wait – it’s not growling, its whimpering; look at it, does it look like puppy turned cannibalistic monster to you? why didn’t it go Cujo like the rest of them”?; already thinking this might be the key to the world’s survival, she reached in cooing, as if reaching to pick up an infant: “here, baby, don’t be afraid.. there, I’ve got you, it’s ok…” whimpering slowed, Jaya gingerly took hold of the trembling dog…

22 thoughts on “Seven. It’s a 6.

  1. Liz H October 31, 2020 / 1:47 pm

    With the music vid…feels like everything isn’t gonna be all right!

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 31, 2020 / 1:57 pm

      Funny about the music vids, Liz. Sometimes I pick them as compliment and mood enhancer. This one I came upon in my morning musical wanderings and as it turned out, listening to it, I trashed the draft I’d been working on and wrote the Six as it is.
      Not intentional to give a foreboding tone to the story! However… there may be a bunch more unpleasantness on the horizon 😉

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  2. UP October 31, 2020 / 6:32 pm

    Excellent six. Favorite line: “…rose like steam off Florida highway after a late afternoon summer shower. “ after 18 years of living there, I can relate.


    • GirlieOnTheEdge October 31, 2020 / 7:05 pm

      Thanks, Paul. It is pretty cool, isn’t it? The steam off the highway, that is 😉


  3. GirlieOnTheEdge November 1, 2020 / 9:37 am

    🤔…. do you see the prompt word. Not thinking yours truly does. Yikes! How did that happen?!
    Tell you what – double duty for me in the next round of SSS. This week’s + the new prompt word coming up 😉


    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 1, 2020 / 9:57 pm

      I’ve got it from a reliable source that yes… all good and maybe better than good 😀


  4. TVTA November 2, 2020 / 12:47 pm

    Wow. A perfect follow up to the 1st episode, with exhaustion, disbelief and shock potrayed… then comes the creeping terror once more, and the group have to act fast. What they find is beautiful and poetic really.
    The line: “already thinking this might be the key to the world’s survival, she reached in cooing, as if reaching to pick up an infant” is just wonderful. Adding those pinches of real sentiment/emotion as counter to fear is one of the keys I think in making a good horror.
    I’m digging this tale so much! 😎

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 2, 2020 / 9:58 pm

      Thank you, V. I love that you see the “beautiful and poetic” in this Six.
      Aha! Right there – “pinches of real sentiment/emotion”. Therein lies my challenge. How to convey emotion to the reader without “writing” it. Like learning a musical instrument, it’s all about practice (and playing). I’m hoping the characters will help me write this story as far as I can – seems like a pretty cool place to practice, right? 😀


  5. clark November 2, 2020 / 3:36 pm

    I’m with V on this one….except (lol) it depends on how the tale unfolds human-nature-istically speaking

    Which, imo. is making for an excellent story within a story. Sure zombies and apocalypse and gore-splattered cloths (oh my), what’s not to like.
    However, the interesting thing will be in how these survivors manifest their humanity. (And, no, I don’t have an easy opinion about that, totally a barroom tossup between finding the human in the monsters and forcing (the Reader) to accept the monster in the humans.

    hell, its common for stories to examine the results of stress on human bonds. but what about when the stress is on a non-human bond (or half bond, man’s best friend)
    Surely be separating the higher forms from the lower, no?


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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 2, 2020 / 10:33 pm

      Always that italicized “except” 😀

      Yes. Absolutely it’s about how the characters relate themselves to the world as it now exists, which is to say totally f’d. Writing a story showing how they deal with the stress of such an extreme change of venue, if you will, is a huge undertaking but like you say – how to write without judgement. For some characters, who they were before will be extinguished by virtue of an inability to deal with the “aberrations” to the norm. Then there’s the tiny task of demonstrating the whole interpersonal/forming alliances or not/who’s the weak link components, etc. Not to talk myself out of continuing the story, lol, but that is a huge challenge! Oh, and let’s not forget about writing of the internal struggles of individuals. Funny, what seems like it would be the most fun to write about, is man’s best friend. No joke about separating the higher from the lower. Key will be who he bonds with (or not) among the survivors. His presence has potential to reveal quite a lot about the characters.


  6. Chris Hall July 30, 2021 / 8:58 am

    I must’ve missed this one, Denise! Sweet hopeful ending… or is it!

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge July 30, 2021 / 8:20 pm

      I believe eventually there’s a hopeful ending 😉
      Thank you for reading and commenting, Chris!

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