Walk On. It’s a 6.

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Who discovered the body?!” Winston Wendall Wentworth, III, chief Inspector in London’s severely understaffed Metropolitan Police Detective Department, towered over most average Londoners at a little over 6′, height and girth bestowing a distinctive booming quality to his voice (most noticeable when barking orders at subordinates, or his wife); yet this morning, for some reason, it seemed to float like soap bubbles high above the din of a gathering crowd ready to feast on tragedy and horror.

He stood at the entrance to a dead end alley littered with newspaper and spent cigars, stained cobblestones wreaking of stale whiskey; staring down at the lifeless corpse of another prostitute, blond locks streaked with dried blood, body mutilated by multiple knife marks, he thought she couldn’t have been much older than his own daughter and realized not even the quickly dissipating fog could lift his mood, this would remain a most gray and solemn morning in the Whitechapel District; so deep in thought he barely heard the voice behind him…

“What is it, Benson, what are you trying to say, speak up and spit it out lad!” Benny (Bernard) Benson, recently promoted Sargent and newest transfer to the Detective Department, hadn’t the pleasure/displeasure of working with one Winston Wendall Wentworth, III for very long and, while no shrinking violet when the occasion demanded, he realized he was intimidated by his new boss and suddenly found himself stuttering uncharacteristically.

“I have the woman, the person, the nun, it was a nun, Inspector, what discovered the body sir, she’s standing over there…”

In the shadow of the blue and white striped awning over the entrance to the Tattersall Pub stood a woman of diminutive stature, dressed in brown tunic, white toque covering her head and shoulders with veil attached, she wore a rosary about her waist for a belt; steel blue eyes now fixed on the oversized man, she walked over to the Inspector and introduced herself, “I’m Sister Mary Ephraim, in London at the bequest of Canon Barnet, the vicar of St. Jude’s Church on Commercial Street and this woman, Inspector, is from my Order, I demand you release her body to me.”

28 thoughts on “Walk On. It’s a 6.

  1. Prats February 7, 2021 / 1:30 am

    Such a visual scene .. I liked reading it more than once to fully admire all the details.

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  2. Chris Hall February 7, 2021 / 5:41 am

    This is brilliant, Denise, you have me hooked! I love the characters already. Where do I get the book?

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 7, 2021 / 9:38 am

      Thanks so much, Chris! I’d been struggling a bit on a storyline this week and Clark suggested I do a “walk on” to his “The Whitechapel Interlude” serial story. Hence the link in the opening line. I was riffing off “Interlude (12)”. It was a lot of fun and a good way to meet new characters 🙂

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  3. Frank Hubeny February 7, 2021 / 6:43 am

    I like the description of the crowd feasting on horror and the rosary used as a belt.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 7, 2021 / 9:40 am

      Thank you, Frank. What is it that draws some to it?? You know, I can’t remember if the nuns that taught me used them as a belt. Around the neck maybe but not sure about belting them.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 7, 2021 / 9:52 am

      Thank you, Janet 🙂 Funny, my original storyline was going to touch a little more directly on Clark’s storyline from his “The Whitechapel Interlude” serial, but sometimes characters insist on their own story, lol.
      There may be more. If Sister Ephraim is so inclined that is 🙂 or! Benny Benson 😀

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 7, 2021 / 1:05 pm

      Um, yes..lol Actually, I’m hoping to learn more from at least one of the characters!
      Yuk Yuk 😆 Good one, D 😁

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 7, 2021 / 1:08 pm

      Yeah, knew I should have written a little intro first but it was so late and I was trying to link up before the hop closed. Won’t let that happen, again 😀
      Thanks, Mimi!


  4. Liz H February 7, 2021 / 1:35 pm

    Wowza! Such vivid characters cantering out of the starting block. What a great Another-Era Mystery set up!
    And the video sets up a mood. Kept waiting (first melody) for it to morph into Pink Floyd (for some weird reason, just in my own head).
    Loved it. All of it!

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 7, 2021 / 3:15 pm

      Thank you, Liz! Funny, when I had the title in mind, I immediately thought of “Wish you Were Here” and the line “walk on part in the war”. “Course I knew I couldn’t post that vid for the time period of my Six 😉
      Like minds, eh? 😀

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      • clark February 8, 2021 / 7:43 pm

        Excellent example of the whole ‘walk-on’ thing that lurks in the background of serial Sixes.
        Should be fun as the two narrative paths twine their way towards the conclusion (or at least the first Book of the Order of Lilith series)

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        • GirlieOnTheEdge February 8, 2021 / 10:24 pm

          Thank you. It’s a very enjoyable challenge and one I should utilize more. Great practice vehicle.
          I believe it will be.


  5. Avia Morrow February 7, 2021 / 11:53 pm

    I fully agree with the others. This is a 5-Star Visual piece…and not the least bit short on intrigue. Exquisitely crafted.

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  6. The Vintage Toy Advertiser February 8, 2021 / 11:37 am

    Nicely done, D. “a gathering crowd ready to feast on tragedy and horror.” Love that line. And ‘Winston Wendall Wentworth, III,’ – is an impressive name. Like how it hung on a mystery note at the end regarding the body.
    I twigged the link to Clark’s Whitechapel stories, and cool you bridged two separate stories like this. I think you captured the period well, but the dialogue for me really stands out, making the characters pop.
    The video is a treat – I watched it twice and only counted three motor vehicles – all those horses! And people darting in and out of the chaotic traffic. Loved seeing those old adverts too.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge February 8, 2021 / 10:15 pm

      Thank you, V. I love his name. His first and last rolled right off my tongue; not much later, his middle and “III” popped, lol. I much prefer when characters tell me their name instead of me naming them 😎 I hope there’s another installment. As always, I appreciate your feedback. Dialogue is difficult to write. Always a challenge if multiple characters speaking. Can mess with pov.
      Wasn’t that a cool vid?! I too loved seeing those ads! Oh, and the double decker horse drawn buses! I never knew! Fascinating.

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