Began with “Veronica”. Followed up last week with “Just Got Complicated” and now….
Let’s go for a hat trick!
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It’s not easy finding a cab at 6:00 am on a Saturday morning but Lady Luck had my back.
I’d put in a couple of blocks between me and the Claridge (didn’t need a late night high roller fingering me as a suspect once the investigation into the stiff upstairs began) when I spotted the yellow of a Plymouth Deluxe, her front bumper shining through the fog like a lifeboat on the ocean. As the cabbie pulled away from the Boardwalk towards Atlantic Avenue, I relaxed and pulled a Luckie from my jacket pocket (the pocket where a stash of money should be), my mind playing 20 questions beginning with why was I set up to take the fall for the murder of some schmuck I’d never seen before.
You didn’t need to speak French to know the term “femme fatale” and the babe I got tangled up with last night definitely put the “fatale” in the “femme”. She wasn’t just after the cash, that was bonus, this was about the guy got snuffed but who was he?
It was no secret the rivalry between the East and West coast crime families had been heating up for a while, but why would an underboss like Sid Solemi be messing with a caporegime like Jimmy Muldoon?
Oh I like the voice you wrote this in, very fitting to the character, it helps me to picture them very well.
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Thank you, Cassa. I’m trying to listen to him, get to know him better 🙂
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Great questions, i hope you are not stopping here.
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Thanks, Mimi. I have a feeling not!
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Great tone in this six. Craftsmanship indeed
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Thank you, Paul.
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So splendidly written, Denise! You capture the genre and the voice perfectly, and now you have to keep this one coming – we’re hooked! 🙂
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Thanks so much, Chris. I’ve been enjoying “exploring” this genre. I hope my protagonist stays in touch. I’d like to tell his story!
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I love the voice in this one. You capture the atmosphere and the time. And the character really comes through.
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Glad you enjoyed, Jenne. Thank you! He seems to have a story to tell.
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And looking forward, perhaps, to hearing what it is…
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“…a Plymouth Deluxe, her front bumper shining through the fog like a lifeboat on the ocean.”
Excellent description/ imagery !
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Thank you, Clark! Enjoyed writing that 🙂
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It’s a mystery. Glad to see this story continuing. This guy’s in it deep, I sure hope you can write hm out of this.
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A huge one. Thanks, D. He is. Bigtime. He’ll have to write his own self out of it 😆
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It is probably good to get away from that scene. Nice description of that cab: “her front bumper shining through the fog like a lifeboat on the ocean”
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As far as he can get! Thank you, Frank 🙂
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Excellent, D. I like how he’s trying to find clarity but is still ‘at sea’, nicely coloured by that “Plymouth Deluxe bumper shining through the fog like a lifeboat on the ocean.” (I wondered if he was being paranoid or really was being tailed for a while?). Anyway, he seems to be asking himself all the right questions and keeping cautious.
Look forward to the next episode! 😎
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At this point, he knows it’s more about the questions than the answers.
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And he, along with us, must endure the suspense!
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This just gets noirer and noirer (which I know isn’t a word in any language, but…)
Love it, Denise
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“Noirer” works for me, CE 🙂 Thank you.
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This came along nicely! You are spinning a golden tale.
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Thanks, Lisa!
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I see a serial SSS in the works. The mystery in the works.has captured our attention.
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Kind of shaping up that way, Pat 🙂 I hope future Sixes continue to keep everyone’s attention!
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