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My mind, racing like a bunch of 10 year olds on bumper cars at the local amusement park, was ready to go super nova, my last bit of patience wearing as thin as “the thin ice of a new day” (your music was pretty cool, dad).
Seated at the orphaned picnic table canopied by moss laced branches of an enormous live oak, Ryan sat transfixed, Cezanne still life, bathing in rivers of angst and emotional turmoil. I’d tried, yet couldn’t loose the chains he’d wrapped himself; sanity screamed to get away from him and fast.
As earth orbits sun; moon around earth, I sensed Seven’s presence; moments later felt the familiar pressure against my thigh; instinctively I reached down to stroke Seven’s upturned head, his golden fur a balm for the dissonance swiftly creeping through my body like kudzu – “yeah.. I know, boy, let’s give Ryan time alone“.
My first instinct was to take the Humvee and Seven and drive – the road, my confessional, my escape, the road…blank and thirsty canvas at the ready to absorb my pent up energy, imprisoned emotions – the road, once friend, now foe in a world gone mad.
I squatted down, hazel eyes locking with golden brown, man’s best friend, my best friend, my protector; wrapping my arms around him, I buried my face in Seven’s fur, an 80lb blanket of love and comfort… “what say we walk a little boy, figure things out…”.
Excellence!
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Thank you, Lisa!
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I like your description of one’s mind ready to go super nova. I hope they can’t change Seven’s loyalty for her like it appears they may have done to Ryan.
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When the pressure builds –
Not to worry, Frank. Seven is a very “special” canine. You give me pause to consider that possibility. Thank you!
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Animal companions, island oasis in a river of fire.
Nice Jethro Tull reference!
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What more could you want, lol
Thanks, Liz. Always loved that song 🙂
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Another great episode. What did I like more, the paragraph on the road? or dog as blankie? This whole thing works and leaves me worried and wanting to know what’s up with Ryan.
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Thank you, D. Love you have to choose 😊
You and me both. Ryan is walking a precipice but clueless he is doing so.
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Another great one.. Lov e the dog. BIG Jethro fan btw.
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(The internet is finally “back”!) Thank you, Paul. 🙂
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So glad Jaya has Seven. A tense episode this, D, nicely worked out as there is no action just thoughts and observations. I hope Ryan can overcome whatever it is that happened to him!
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And Seven feels the same about Jaya. She did save his life after all. Was in a more “cerebral” mood, so thank you for that, V.
Me too! At this point, not sure how Ryan will work through things.
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That’s true. They have a special relationship bonded early on at the beginning of the story.
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A pause in the action for reflection but the tension is palpable, Denise.
You describe beautifully both what the road is for Jaya and what Seven is for her.
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I’m glad it came across, Jenne.
Thank you. Both are important elements in her world.
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Amazing descriptions!
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Thank you, Romi.
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Another wow. Hope they can get Ryan back.
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Thanks, Mimi. I’m thinking it may be more difficult than anticipated.
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Beautifully crafted piece, Denise, with the potential to generate many scenarios in following episodes. PS – I think you lost an ‘in’ in Sentence 3. No room at the ‘in’ 😉
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Thank you, Doug.
Ah, the missing “in”. Intentionally left it out but I’m appreciative of your editorial eye 🙂
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Beautiful. What a beautiful expression ‘ an 80lb blanket of love and comfort…’
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Thank you, Indira 😊
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My pleasure.
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I feel I could cut the tension here with a knife, Denise! So worried for your characters, especially Seven (of course). Desperate for the next episode… If this were a book I’d be up reading the whole night.
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I’m glad to hear that, Chris! I’m discovering perhaps writing action scenes rank higher on the “ease” scale, lol.
Thank you 🙂
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Very heart warming ♥
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Thank you, C.
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Extremely loud and incredibly close this Six is…
“As earth orbits sun; moon around earth, I sensed Seven’s presence; ” is the most, red hot iron, accurate representation of the unspoken bond between a human and his/her companion.
Thank you for reviving the feeling of loss of my companion, even after 19 years.
(The Minstrel in the Gallery is my favourite album of JT)
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Liked the wordage (in your comment) ‘Extremely loud….’
good lick
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Credits where credits due: it’s the title of a 2011 Tom Hanks movie.
Perhaps some other time I’ll have an original lick worthy of your approval .
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I’m honored my words spoke to you in such a way, Spira. It is a most special bond.
May those feelings be more joy than sadness, more smiles than tears.
(Not familiar. Will remedy that)
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Nice ‘view without from within‘ turn…
I would hazard we are all tempted (and intimidated) by the tug of war between the story told in subjective terms versus ‘here is what happened, decide for your own self how the characters felt about things.’
As did the other commenters who recognize the innate superiority of the canine race, I would suggest a dog is the best of imperfect mirrors for Readers to follow the development of our characters.
Good Six, yo
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Thank you, Clark.
I would not argue that point. Each, a challenge in and of itself.
The best.
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It is so easy to visualize the scenes from your descriptions, as well as to feel the emotions of the characters. Yes, that second sentence does seem like a Cezanne still life. Taking a walk with a dog, no make that your dog, is beneficial to both, and oft times some of the problems get worked out along the way.
Wishing you a wonderful Thanksgiving week.
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That is encouraging to hear, Pat. It’s what I find most challenging about writing – conveying (showing) the emotional state of a character. Oh, walks with the dog is a most wonderful thing. Amazing how that works 🙂
Thank you! You also have a wonderful week and a Happy Thanksgiving.
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