Mea Culpa. It’s a 6.

In our last episode of the Origin Story for “Zombies and puppies”, we were enjoying a late lunch with friends Fr. Lazarus and Tomassa Bianchi in a red leathered booth at a diner turned confessional.

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Dusk softly encased the Juke Box Diner like a warm oven mitt over a newly baked casserole; the two friends, one priest, one priest-like in sentiment, found themselves unable to leave the oasis that was a silver diner set back on a busy highway.

“You know I don’t do riddles, man, so tell me what that means, “may have opened the gates to hell” and don’t be going all metaphorical on me, plain English padre.”

Father Luca Domenico Lazarus looked directly into the puzzled eyes of his old friend and confidant, Tomassa “Tommy” Bianchi; without blinking whispered, “I believe I have have invited the devil himself into this world, this earthly plane“.

“Whoah, wait a minute, you talking like in Constantine, where Keanu tries to keep the doors to the underworld closed, keep out demons and shit… you’re telling me you opened the front door… what the hell, Luca, you lost your mind?”

“The exorcism I performed, it wasn’t right Tommy – when I’d finished, when the man I believed I’d exorcised, Luis, casually got up from the bed like he was waking up from a 30 minute nap and walked downstairs with his wife, Maria, to see me out, it was a screaming red flag my brain refused to acknowledge – people who’ve just been exorcized don’t see the priest out, casually thanking him for driving demons from their bodies. Everything felt wrong – Luis was wrong, something was still inside, wearing him; when he said goodbye, his smile raised the hairs on the back of my neck, his voice made my stomach convulse; at first I thought he was speaking Hebrew, but it wasn’t, this Bolivian carpenter with four kids, who could barely speak English, was speaking goddamn ancient Aramaic.”

31 thoughts on “Mea Culpa. It’s a 6.

  1. ceayr November 25, 2021 / 5:56 pm

    I have to say, Denise, that I’m no expert on exorcisms, but I think the ol’ padre’s right to be concerned!

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  2. Doug Jacquier November 25, 2021 / 7:12 pm

    An exorcise in the riddling and diddling on the Highway to Hell, along with the dubious claim of the Priest to being fluent in Aramaic. ;- ) Fun and clever.

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  3. messymimi's meanderings November 25, 2021 / 8:15 pm

    Ooof. Yep, somebody let the dogs out, and when it’s done inadvertantly, i always feel terrible for the person in that hot seat.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 26, 2021 / 6:17 am

      Woof! Woof!
      While his heart was in the right place (if not guided by ego, overconfidence and naivete), he kinda changed the course of history. Not so sure he’ll have a lot of sympathy when word gets out. If it gets out.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 26, 2021 / 6:21 am

      Glad you enjoyed, oox2! That must have been cool. Certain movies are best viewed on the “big screen”. I believe it 🙂

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  4. Spira November 26, 2021 / 1:24 am

    And the four children came forth, Mikha’el, Rafa’el, Gabri’el and Lucius…

    Cinematic quality tension (don’t hurry to release 😆)!

    [Beethoven’s silence is excellent; I think it would shine even more if it was recorded with a real orchestra]

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 26, 2021 / 7:01 am

      ..ah…you pull forth from my unconscious…

      Thank you, Spira. I do not believe I am in danger of doing that, lol

      [Agreed.]

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  5. clark November 26, 2021 / 7:44 am

    Nice Sixifying.

    Gots it all: narrative-enhancing backstory, most excellent of settings* and repartee. What more can a body ask for in a Six?

    * diners and lounges surely the most iconic of settings.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 26, 2021 / 4:21 pm

      Thank you, Clark.

      Yes. Those two settings are most iconic and enjoyable to write “in”.

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  6. Chris Hall November 26, 2021 / 10:25 am

    I love the way the tension ramps up from the gentle opening line to the phrase ‘…something was still inside, wearing him’ in the final sentence. Masterfully crafted, Denise!

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  7. Frank Hubeny November 26, 2021 / 2:26 pm

    Good warning sign: “people who’ve just been exorcized don’t see the priest out, casually thanking him for driving demons from their bodies” He must have messed up that exorcism.

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  8. The Atomic Mage November 27, 2021 / 6:19 am

    “Luis was wrong, something was still inside, wearing him” my gosh, D, that line delivers a chill 😱
    Plus, the language switch at the end!

    Brilliant to read some more of this backstory. Hope we can visit this ‘confessional’ again .

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 27, 2021 / 9:22 am

      Yay! Mission accomplished then, V?
      Funny, that. There is a story behind how it is Fr. Lazarus recognizes this ancient language. Now, I just need him to tell me, so I can tell everyone else, lol

      Glad you enjoyed. I look forward to taking everyone there again. Diners, they are… a world unto themselves 😎

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      • The Atomic Mage November 27, 2021 / 10:48 am

        Mission accomplished! And so true… we have to sometimes wait for our characters to tell us things before we can tell everyone else 🙂
        Yes, US diners are a good setting. I was thrilled to go to one in Seattle when I visited the States – all done out like a classic one from a movie. An absolute treat 🙂

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  9. jenne49 November 27, 2021 / 6:22 am

    ‘Something was still inside, wearing him…’ Wow! Powerful showing of possession! And I’m still smiling at the language of the first paragraph – almost as though I’m a newly baked casserole and a warm oven mitt has been placed over me! Kinda worried about Luis though.
    I was sure I had posted a comment yesterday, but it seems I only started, got distracted and didn’t fibish. Sorry!

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    • jenne49 November 27, 2021 / 6:23 am

      Actually, I very rarely ‘fibish’! Apologies again!

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge November 27, 2021 / 9:30 am

      Thank you, Jenne! Possession stuff freaks me out in general, so was surprised those words came to mind so easily.
      🙂
      Yeah, Luis, when himself, is a really great guy, well known in the community. Shame…
      Dontcha hate when that happens! Glad you came back today 😊

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