Just Got Complicated. It’s a 6.

I came to in a hotel room with the stench of a dead body stand in for smelling salts.

Three times the size of my walk-up in the “Heights”, sophistication and refinement written all over it, this was no rent by the hour room; I needed a cigarette and reached for the inside of my jacket only I wasn’t wearing my jacket, it lay neatly folded over the back of the loveseat facing a massive window high above the sidewalk with a view of the… the ocean? A little unsteady and a lot pissed off, I moved towards couch and cigarettes; as I passed the mahogany writing desk, it’s chair neatly pushed in, the hotel’s letterhead caught my eye: “Welcome to the Claridge, Where Everyone’s Treated like a Star“, Atlantic City, New Jersey – the Claridge was easy 20 miles from the Starfish Lounge.

I grabbed a cigarette ignoring the dead guy on the floor, knife deep in his chest, took a drag deeper than the Hudson River Canyon and re-ran the footage from last night at the Starfish. We both drank a lot, me whiskey, her, gin martinis; I remember it was around 2 a.m. because I’d looked at my watch figuring I better leave to make the drop to Jimmy’s; no sooner had I looked up she was leaning over me, softly whispering in my ear, cleavage teasing just as quietly, daring me to pull her closer – next thing I know we’re hailing a cab; after that it was lights out, bubba.  

Now I’m standing in a high dollar room at the Claridge Hotel in Atlantic City with a case of amnesia, a dead body, a missing woman and a missing envelope of cash… I needed to improvise a plan and fast.

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24 thoughts on “Just Got Complicated. It’s a 6.

    • GirlieOnTheEdge May 13, 2021 / 9:36 pm

      I am fairly convinced he will find his way out. But it won’t be easy.


  1. Frank Hubeny May 13, 2021 / 11:57 pm

    It looks like she was trouble. I like the comparison of the stench of the dead body with smelling salts. He was left alive for some reason.

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  2. clark May 14, 2021 / 6:15 am

    excellent ending line.. gives that forward momentum and not only leaves us (the Readers) wanting more, but need it as we’ve become invested in the protagonist and kinda don’t want him to get messed. Well, too</em< messed up.
    Good Six, yo

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    • clark May 14, 2021 / 6:16 am

      damn! tried to get cool with the html and left off the closing

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge May 14, 2021 / 7:44 pm

      Thank you, Clark. I certainly hope there’s “wanting more” as I believe there will be, lol
      Had zero intention of doing a “follow up” to “Veronica” but there it was! 🙂


  3. The Atomic Mage May 14, 2021 / 12:05 pm

    Good one, D. What a wild, hazy and mysterious ride, shot through the lens of someone just coming to and gagging for a cigarette. Hate to be in his shoes, probably only marginally better off than the dead guy with the knife in his chest. Ouch. 😎

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  4. Liz H May 14, 2021 / 4:46 pm

    Wow! Stellar first line–I was totally hooked. And the ending keeps me bumping along behind on the tow line…

    Liked by 1 person

    • GirlieOnTheEdge May 16, 2021 / 10:24 am

      Thank you, C.E.! I’m enjoying the genre for forcing me to write shorter, more concise sentences.


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