Severed, tattered, torn asunder, the relationship lay abandoned on the life stained crumbling curb like last week’s leftover trash
Disparate in temperament, struggle bred contempt until neither saw resolution, no surrender save that to abandon
One, tethered by regret, the other, bound by grief, pilfered memories lay strewn about like confetti shot from a taser, numbered slivers, material for a tragic best seller
Book or film, song lyric or sonnet, all friend to heart’s hurt, spirit’s sorrow, long a comfort shared, now impotent, unable to give passage from the place of no return
(And) so they wallowed in the wake of one more setting sun, insouciant to the gesture of such grandeur
Until evening bled the sky black, a sidewalk supernova, this was their “last hurrah”
Deep! Good six
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…as a canary in a coal mine. Thanks, Paul 🙂
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No wonder I had nothing for the cue word! you’ve got it all over here!! I do love this. I wrote a six, without the cue word and will post it probably tomorrow linking to you for inspiration on the six sentences idea… Once again excellent write!!
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Thanks, Violet! I daresay my hat size just increased lol
I have a feeling with your writing ability, you could slide the prompt word into your 6 smoother than a pinch hitter sliding into home. Look forward to reading it.
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Excellent internal rhythm* to the words
Good Six
*or whatever the correct term is for when the sound of the words pull and push the reader along
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Thank you, Clark. I appreciate the feedback.
Without benefit of one of those flashes of light, behold 1 draft wonder, lol, I found the process of writing this piece interesting just for that challenge. How to (hopefully) effectively move the piece (and the reader) along at a pace of my intent. May I echo an oft heard lament…”damn, writing is hard” 😀
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So deeply descriptive, i am in awe.
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Thank you, Mimi! I’m glad you enjoyed it.
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That is really a gorgeous six sentence story.
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Thank you, Faith!
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Um… wow. It flows, but with a strong current, a rushing river in spring, edgy with ice and undertows.
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Thank you! I love your comment. Poetry on poetry 🙂
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I am reading and feeling this on the eve of a special day. Special not for any reasons obvious or expected.
I bled some ink today…you did also, when you wrote this.
Did you use Sans Tears or Times New Hideout fonts?
You really think that an X ray of your words will reveal anything useful to further one’s technique, when what is the matter is unseen by human eyes?
Hmm…time to play some blues.
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… you “bled some ink”. Love those words as they perfectly describe certain moments in time.
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