Quicksand and Candy Canes. It’s a 6.

Scene:  St. Vincent’s Hospital, Room 279 around 7:45 am. This is the 3rd and final, in an impromptu Six Sentence Café & Bistro mini-series, Six. Inciting Six here, follow up Six there.

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“Ford! Nick! wake up, I’ve got a 10:00 appointment, I need to leave”.

Chris walked around to where 2 men were crumpled in their chairs like empty packs of cigarettes – she nudged the man with red hair, white hospital blanket wrapped around his shoulders like an elderly grandmother’s shawl; Ford reluctantly opened his eyes, turned to the man next to him, “wake up, man, Chris said she has to leave“, Nick’s eyes opened instantly, gave Ford the finger, “I wasn’t asleep“, both men laughed quietly.

Mimi walked into the room, Hūnga, wearing a brand new “Service Dog” harness, at her side; seeing the amused surprise of  her fellow Proprietors of the Six Sentence Café and Bistro, she said surprisingly loudly “what?… a fib told in the service of good with an intent of lifesaving is hardly a sin, besides, it was the only way I could bring him in with me“.

Chris brought Mimi up to speed as to Denise’s condition, there were no medical reasons they could account for, for why she remained unconscious – no physical damage to her body, the woman with the blond hair should not be unconscious; the decision had been made to bring in a team of specialists if she didn’t wake up in the next 24 hours.

Denise’s eyelids fluttered, feather light, her hands quivering slightly on the bedsheet – “Où suis-je?”….voice gentle, soft, her 4 friends stared in disbelief knowing Denise did not speak French and yet she was, fluently…”je pense que je suis perdu mais je ne sais pas où…je rêve… où es-tu, Nick?”…

Her voice, though soft, now sounded fear; Hūnga, breaking free from Mimi’s grasp, went quickly to the right side of the hospital bed and pushed his large black nose under the palm of her right hand, gently lifting it off the bed, lowering it, repeating this action until Denise opened her eyes, her hand still resting on the canine’s head, smiled and asked, “what did I miss?”

24 thoughts on “Quicksand and Candy Canes. It’s a 6.

  1. Doug Jacquier August 18, 2022 / 11:44 pm

    ‘2 men were crumpled in their chairs like empty packs of cigarettes’. Great line.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 18, 2022 / 11:55 pm

      Thank you, Doug. (From the fingertips of a non-smoker who spent years around smokers, lol)

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  2. jenne49 August 19, 2022 / 6:00 am

    I’m with Doug – great line about the crumpled cigarette packets.
    And a happy ending to the (current) story – the human – dog bondis special.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 19, 2022 / 6:13 am

      Thank you, Jenne.
      It is, although a mystery most likely left unsolved…?
      One could almost say, sacred.

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  3. Frank Hubeny August 19, 2022 / 10:22 am

    I like dog’s role at the end of the story. At least you (or the Denise in the story) can now speak French.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 19, 2022 / 10:25 pm

      Have dog, have perfect ending, Frank 😀
      If only I could! The Denise character can’t either, she was channeling Angelique.

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  4. messymimi's meanderings August 19, 2022 / 4:22 pm

    No lying needed, really, he can be registered as a pet partner and go where service dogs are allowed, it’s easy, he’s well trained and would pass quickly. In fact, i have a connection…

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 19, 2022 / 10:49 pm

      Interesting. I’m not caught up on current programs for guide/aid dogs, so that is good to know, Mimi.
      His is well trained! I’ve no doubt he would!

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  5. clark August 21, 2022 / 8:28 am

    Nice ensemble action… scene, action plot shooting off into the future

    pleasing wordage

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  6. The Atomic Mage August 21, 2022 / 2:18 pm

    Love the packs of crumpled cigarette packs visual. Then Ford and Nick’s buddy-movie interaction – Tarantino-esque!
    Nice ending to this trilogy SSC&B tale, D 😎 and good to see Mimi and Hūnga making an appearance… I’ll join the chorus of the others that this calls for another episode or two – we’ve yet to see the smile of the tall thin man welcoming us back at the café, while Tom cooks us some eggs 😉


    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 21, 2022 / 4:54 pm

      Many thanks, V. 😎
      Yes! Mimi and Hūnga appear to have developed a special bond.
      Point taken! Indeed, the tall thin man has been patiently waiting.
      Oh yeah. Tom has no idea how we’ve missed those eggs!

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  7. Spira August 22, 2022 / 5:33 am

    I have been called my share of names in my life…never before an empty pack of cigarettes 😆

    The characters intensity, emotional and not, follows the, seemingly simple yet far from it, recipe of yours.

    And Denise, the added layer of Mimi’s relationship with Hūnga and his action as a beacon to guide Denise, the Bartender back into the light…filled me with the warmth and hope we all need in our lives.

    French I have never spoken…but there are certain voices that when they do I am enchanted…their number, increased by one.

    Denise…Angelique…δεν έχετε χαθεί…εδώ είμαι…όταν η ελπίδα βυθίζεται σαν πέτρα, πάρε το χέρι μου και μαζί θα περπατήσουμε πίσω στο σπίτι μας…όσο μακρύς κι αν είναι ο δρόμος.

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    • GirlieOnTheEdge August 23, 2022 / 12:25 am

      Thank you, Nick.
      It’s what dogs do, if we allow them.

      …όσο μακρύς κι αν είναι ο δρόμος.

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